Your story is so impressive! You're always showing things at I hadn't thought to consider, pointing the camera at stuff I never would have looked at. That aspect reminds of me Neuromancer, how dense and busy it is.

Also I really love how Byron had a boner in his swim trunks and Adrian just kind of dispassionately noted it and that was that. It just seems like a very neat way to show the two of them juxtaposed, Adrian being a creepy bland cipher and Byron being random as only a truly crazy person can be. Not that non-crazy old men never sport wood at the pool :D it's just a wtf kind of sight to picture.